The bar chart below shows the international student enrolments at three universities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make a comparison where relevant.
The bar chart illustrates overseas
learners
admitted at Smithtown Use synonyms
University
, Use synonyms
University
of Riverview and Earlwood Use synonyms
University
. The unit is measured in number of students. Use synonyms
Overall
, Bharat was the topmost Linking Words
undergraduates
admitted to Riverview Fix the agreement mistake
undergraduate
Use synonyms
college
and Capitalize word
College
lowest
Correct article usage
the lowest
scholars
Correct quantifier usage
number of scholars
were
received from the people of Columbia.
Change the verb form
was
To begin
with, Indians were the topmost undergraduates admitted at Riverview Linking Words
Use synonyms
college
with approximately 7500 scholars followed by citizens of Nepal with 5000 Capitalize word
College
learners
and Vietnam with 4000 Use synonyms
learners
. Use synonyms
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Acceptance
Correct article usage
The acceptance
rate
from the people of Columbia and Indonesia hits the lowest Use synonyms
rate
of about 1800 and 1500 respectively.
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In addition
, foreigners from Bharat Linking Words
remains
Correct subject-verb agreement
remain
topmost
undergraduates admitted at Smithtown Correct article usage
the topmost
Use synonyms
college
with 6000 scholars and Nepal accounted for 5000 Capitalize word
College
learners
followed by Vietnam with about 4000 Use synonyms
learners
. Use synonyms
Finally
, Earlwood Linking Words
Use synonyms
college
accounted Capitalize word
College
the
lowest Change preposition
for the
acceptance
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rate
from overseas schoolers with Indians, Nepal and Vietnam hitting the Use synonyms
overall
Linking Words
acceptance
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rate
of about 5000,4500 and 4000 Use synonyms
learners
respectively. Citizens from Colombia and Indonesia accounted for Use synonyms
fewer
Fix the agreement mistake
a lower
acceptance
Use synonyms
rate
into Earlwood Use synonyms
University
.Use synonyms
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Vocabulary: Replace the words learners, university, college, acceptance, rate with synonyms.
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