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Argument: Every year several languages die out. This is not important because life will be easier if there are fewer languages in the world. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Language
 is one of the means of communication. Some people believe that life will be easier if there are fewer
languages
 in the world and some disagree with it. In
this
 essay, I will discuss the positive and negative effects of it. I opine that having a fewer
language
 will be better for easier communication.
For example
, you visited one country that speaks a
language
 different than what
u
Correct your spelling
you
 speak. Just imagine how difficult it would be. A couple of years back, I moved in from the Philippines to the Middle East and I needed to study and learn their
language
 for me to fit in.
Also
, some people will not adjust for you, you are the one who needs to adjust for them,
besides
 it's their country.
On the other hand
, learning many
languages
 is fun and exciting. If you are a keen communicator
then
 a listener it would be better if you will study different kinds of
languages
 so that you can communicate with anyone anytime. And it would be a great help especially if you love travelling. In conclusion,
language
 is our key to understanding each person better
as well as
 listening.
However
, I believe that having fewer
languages
 would be better for best communication.
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task achievement
The essay should maintain a consistent tone and avoid colloquial language such as 'u' instead of 'you'.
coherence cohesion
Ensure each paragraph has a clear central idea that supports your argument directly.
coherence cohesion
The essay has a clear introduction and conclusion, which helps the reader follow your argument.
task achievement
You provided personal examples which made the essay more engaging and relatable.

Word Count

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