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The graph below shows the consumption of fish and some different kinds of meat in a European country between 1979 and 2004. Summarise the infomation by selecting and reporting the main features, and make compasions where relevant. Wirte at least 150 words.

The graph below shows the consumption of fish and some different kinds of meat in a European country between 1979 and 2004. Summarise the infomation by selecting and reporting the main features, and make compasions where relevant. Wirte at least 150 words.
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The provided line graph gives information about the consumption of fish,chicken,beef and
lamb
in particular
 Europe
country
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countries
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 from 1979 to 2004. Units were measured
by
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in
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 grams.
Overall
. It can be shown that chicken was the most popular food
along
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over
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 the years. Meanwhile, fish was the least common source in
the
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Europe. Beef and
lamb
 witnessed a dramatic decline.
To begin
 with, chicken began growing from 1979
to1984
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to 1984
 at about 160 grams per person.
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 it experienced a significant increase
1999
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in 1999
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 at around 180g and reached
the
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 peak in 2004 at 240 grams.
On the other hand
, beef was
highest
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 form of meat for
European
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Europeans
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, followed by
lamb
 in 1979 almost 230g and nearly 160
g
 respectively. The two products of meat witnessed a significant decrease until 1984 at approximately 170
gand
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and
 130g respectively.
Moreover
, they had a gradual decline from 1989 to 1999.
Lamb
 on
contrary
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, rose gradually in 200 at nearly 70
g
. Fish was the lowest source of protein for
European
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Europeans
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, each person consumed around 60g in 1979 and it continued to drop to about 30
g
 in 2004.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words lamb, g with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradual" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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