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The table below presents the food consumption per a person weekly in European country in 1992, 2002, and 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The table below presents the food consumption per a person weekly in European country in 1992, 2002, and 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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The table above shows
about
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food
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 consumption in European
country
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countries
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 and
this
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taken
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 per
a
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person in 1992, 2002, and 2012.
Overall
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, there are five types
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food
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of food
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 consumption by
european
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Europeans
,
such
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 as
vegetable
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vegetables
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, meat, wheat,
bean
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beans
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, and cheese. In general, from 1992 until 2012,
european
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European
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consume
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consumed
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the vegetable
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vegetable
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vegetables
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 in first rank and cheese
is
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 the lowest. From the
year
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years
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 1992, 2002, and 2012,
vegetable
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vegetables
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 regularly increased. Start from 2140, 2190, until 2220.
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, the consumption of meat in 1992
is
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 1145. After that, in 2002 hit
the
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 peak at 1211.
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, in 2012 got decreased
at
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 1132.
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there is wheat
that
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 constantly increased from 837 to 977 in 2012.
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,
bean
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beans
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 stagnantly always around 500
grams
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.
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, cheese at 113 in 1992
also
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 got
same
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grams
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 in 2002 and 2012 with
total
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125
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of 125
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grams
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To sum up
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, mostly the kind of
food
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 that
consumed
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is consumed
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 by
europe
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European
 people originally increased. Even though, there
is
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are
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food
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foods
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 that have
same
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the same
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grams
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 in different
year
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years
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words food, grams with synonyms.
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