People living in large cities have to face many problems in everyday life. What are those problems? Should the government encourage people to move to regional towns? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant.

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to live in
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, they face many issues in it like
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air pollution
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problems
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air pollution
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, there diseases like fever, nose cold, and headache are widespread. another reason
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the cost
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of living in
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department
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home tools
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food are expensive. A
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solution to lose these problems is
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launch publicity campaigns to
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encourage
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quiet
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near of
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,
population
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the population
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can
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easily
move to their places of job.
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to
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choice to live in rural
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homes
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, shops, and
departement
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department
to below 150
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than in Mscut and Sohar.
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number of individuals living in popular
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areas
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wil
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will
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more
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issues
like air pollution, annoyance, and
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expensive
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living.
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, these
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issues
can be dealt with if
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the goverment
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goverment
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government
arange
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arrange
area
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areas
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for living
and
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apply
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far away from
cities
that it is
charactrized
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characterized
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by
quite
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quiet
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, cheaper and clean air.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • urban congestion
  • traffic jams
  • lengthy commutes
  • high cost of living
  • financial strain
  • air pollution
  • noise pollution
  • quality of life
  • green space
  • recreational areas
  • social isolation
  • fast-paced lifestyle
  • public services strain
  • overpopulation
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