Some people think that all unviersity students should study whatever they like. Others believe that they only be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future, such as those related to science and technology. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

While
some would argue that undergraduates should
study
subjects
related to science and technology, I believe that
students
should
study
whatever they want. On the one hand, many graduates actually have problems with
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laziness
and struggle to start practising. Because
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they often choose easy
subjects
to learn and
also
do not know what they need in the
future
.
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subjects
. As they say, it is hard to
study
science,
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many of their friends chose easy ones that they can handle, but
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in the
future
. It means they are not going to practise and learn useful skills.
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, I believe that
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opinion and choice
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to be considered in that situation.
On the other hand
, it is thought that
students
have their own
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about
subjects
they need to
study
for
future
job experience. That means graduates know what they need for their profession and
also
can experiment with
subjects
to find out what they want. Because,
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not need psychology for
future
work that,
therefore
, takes time to
study
and prepare.
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students
can schedule their own
study
week and organise lessons they are going to visit in the university.
That is
a great opportunity for undergraduates because they can structure their own time for
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subjects
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ones,
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cutting down useless
subjects
. I believe
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good because it helps
students
a lot and
also
can give them freedom
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choice. In conclusion, forcing
students
to
study
science is not a great idea. That can help them be more disciplined, but I believe giving them
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is better.
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