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Some people think that all unviersity students should study whatever they like. Others believe that they only be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future, such as those related to science and technology. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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 of the widely discussed issues nowadays is private
cars
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 and their effect
our
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on our
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 environment. It is undeniable that private
transports
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 has become an essential part of our life.
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, there is
not
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 absolute agreement as some
people
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 find
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use
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 private
cars
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 beneficial,
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 others consider everything associated with private
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transport
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 negatively. Surely, there are both pros and cons to
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use
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cars
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, but
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 believe
disadvantages
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the disadvantages
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 outweigh
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the advantages
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.
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 of the major disadvantages of the 21st century is pollution, which is greatly changing our environment. Statistics show that
people
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 around the world
use
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 more than
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 car for themselves, which is causing concern among the government. Environmental pollution poses a danger to every person, both now and in the future.
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, the
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 of private
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 creates traffic congestion, which affects
people
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's
behavior
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 and health. Being stuck in traffic is inconvenient for
people
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, especially those with a schedule, and can cause stress. Environmental pollution and
people
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's health are the main resources for the government, which is thinking deeply about changing the habits of
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people
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.
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One
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 the other hand,
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 a private car
more
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 comfortable for everyone, which
save
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 their time. Nowadays no
one
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 has spare time, which
previde
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provide
 to them
use
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 the public
transpots
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transport
transports
,
therefore
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 there
are
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 well
reason
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 to acquire
cars
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.
in addition
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, share with
you
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 family members we can save our money,
that
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assist
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to
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us improve our financial
situations
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. Other
people
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 consider
this
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 notion is well
decision
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 for them to live a
comfort
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 life. Hawing weight everything mentioned
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, we can come to
a
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 conclusion that
to banned
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use
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private
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of private
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cars
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 in certain city centers excellent solution, that
clean
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 our environment
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also
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increase
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peoples
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 health, which is
main
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 factor for the government.

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task achievement
Work on developing your arguments more comprehensively with specific examples. This will enhance the persuasiveness of your points.
coherence cohesion
Improve logical flow by ensuring each point naturally leads to the next, aiding reader comprehension.
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Pay attention to language accuracy to avoid minor errors which could obscure meaning. This will improve clarity.
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Conclude with more emphasis on your personal viewpoint to strengthen the task response.
coherence cohesion
The essay has a clear introduction and conclusion, which structures it well.
task achievement
Your ability to identify and elaborate on both advantages and disadvantages shows balanced discussion abilities.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
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  • creativity and satisfaction
  • employability
  • job market trends
  • economic growth
  • practicality
  • cultural richness
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  • global economic standpoint
  • technological advancement
  • oversupply of skills
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