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Many people cheat on tests and even in sporting events like recreational marathons. What drives individuals to cheat, and how is this behaviour detrimental (negative) to society?

In recent decades, loads of
people
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cheat
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 on any aspect of living in
oreder
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order
 to acquire
the
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interest. In
this
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that result
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result
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results
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 in
people
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to cheat
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cheating
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 and
explan
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explain
 its drawbacks in
society
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. On the one hand,
people
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diffirent
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different
 areas in order to be successful.
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, In modern
society
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, personalities and influencers’s content connect successful
image
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 to less application and easy to reach
that
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encourage
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encouraging
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people
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become
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 successful without dedicating their time and effort .
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,
people
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 like to avoid
a
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danger and the risk of
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failure
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failure
, meanwhile,
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showing
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show
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 less weakness.
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,
avoiding
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by avoiding
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 blame from parents, students have a higher motivated
cheating
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to cheat
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 on
test
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tests
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.
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, in order to achieve a target , professional athletes
taking
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 prohibited medicines during competition.
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, cheating
make
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makes
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 our
society
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 become
unsaftly
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unsafely
.
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, In order to accelerate accomplish procedures and earn extra money, corporations may reduce the time and quality.
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,
manufacturer
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manufacturers
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 build unsafe structures,
retail
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and retail
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seller
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sellers
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 sell
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the lower
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lower quality
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of
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products.
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, cheating
lead
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leads
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 to less belief and full of
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aggression
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 between interpersonal
connection
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connections
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.
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, cheating
result
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results
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 in
people
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become
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becoming
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 lazy. Less effort and time of
employee
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employees
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,
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 may reduce
companise
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companies
 to earn more money. In conclusion,
as a result
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 of
to be
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being
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 successful,
meanwhile
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meanwhile,
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avoid
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avoiding
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a
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apply
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danger and the risk of
failur
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failure
,
people
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on
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in
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diffirent
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different
 areas.
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, cheating not only
make
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makes
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 our
society
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 become unsaftly but
decreasing
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decreases
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 belief and
encourage
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encourages
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people
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become
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to become
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 lazy.

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Grammar
Work on correcting grammatical mistakes to make your writing clearer and more professional. Pay attention to subject-verb agreement and proper use of articles.
Vocabulary
Enhance your vocabulary to include more precise and varied word choices. This will make your essay more engaging and easier to follow.
Content
Expand on your examples and main points to provide more depth to your argument. Consider exploring the consequences of cheating from multiple perspectives and providing specific, detailed examples.
Content
You've identified the key reasons behind why people cheat and how it impacts society negatively.
Structure
Your essay has a clear introduction and conclusion which help to frame your argument well.
Relevance
The essay covers relevant points related to the topic, including a discussion of motivations for cheating and its societal consequences.

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