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Big salary is much more important than job satisfaction. Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 words. There is no denying the fact that job satisfaction and big salary both of them

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There is no denying the fact that
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satisfaction
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 and a big
salary
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 are more crucial in other life. Do think cost
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 is big important than
job
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satisfaction
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? the benefits have
become of the increasing
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 in recent years. Those who support
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satisfaction
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 believe that
people
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 are more comfortable doing the best of here
job
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. There are different reasons for the better occupations for
people
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. The initial to consider is that
,
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people
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 should
work
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satisfaction
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 to obtain a Special deal.
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, there are many different jobs in another country It makes you very delighted to do
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 and in return, the
salary
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 is a little average, Some
people
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 a
job
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 as a teacher woe extremely hard to assist all the students and feel over the moon to educate them.
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, all
people
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work
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who work
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 on
job
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satisfaction
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has
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have
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relaxed
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a relaxed
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,personality, and leisure time. To elaborate more
in
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job
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 comfort
make
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people
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 relax to do
every thing
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 and improve in many types. If
people
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work
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 on
job
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satisfaction
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 that builds a strong personality to communicate with others and assist all
people
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 that Little average
salary
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 becomes workers doing the best kind of
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.The study says the workers in Kuwait are comfortable with
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satisfaction
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 in recent years.
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, there are a number of reasons why
this
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 is not the right course of action for a big
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 in
a different jobs
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different jobs
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.The first on to consider
that
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 some
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 think a big
salary
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 in different jobs is horrible for The country's economy. Take
for instance
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, a lot of money in a
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 makes
people
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 more eager to bring in high money, and they do not do many distinguished works and provide something useful to society, and they
also
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 do not find comfort in that.
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, you should give big salaries for high occupations They deserve Those who
work
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 in hospitals are doctors because they save
people
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's lives.
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, there are no essay answers to
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People
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 have different views.On balance,I tend to believe that
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satisfaction
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was
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 the best for everybody.
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introduction
You should aim to make your introduction clearer and more engaging. Make sure to state your position clearly in the introduction and provide an outline of the points you will discuss.
connections between ideas
Each paragraph should contain one main idea and be clearly connected to the central thesis. Use linking words to enhance the flow between sentences and paragraphs.
examples
You should provide more detailed and relevant examples to support your arguments. Concrete examples help to clarify and strengthen your points.
elaboration of ideas
It's important to elaborate more on key points to avoid sounding too general and ensure that your ideas are well-developed and supported.
addressing both sides
You have addressed both sides of the argument, which shows a balanced perspective.
effective conclusion
Your conclusion summarizes your viewpoint effectively.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

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...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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