The charts below show the percentages of men and women aged 60-64 in employment in four countries in 1970 and 2000.

The charts below show the percentages of men and women aged 60-64 in employment in four countries in 1970 and 2000.
The graphs below
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the number of men and women who are 60-64 the act of working for
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trends in four
countries
in 1970 and 2000.
Overall
, during
this
thirty-year period,
Japan
remained the biggest indicator
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working,with all three other
countries
that much less on them. In 1970
it is clear that
the
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was much better, from
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diagram
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the highest index was in
japan
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Japan
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with 84%,
while
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men
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aged 60-64 in
employment
Australia and Belgium
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had a strong industrial base, with significant
employment
as much as each other.
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by 2000, the gap in occupation between
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four
countries
had widened and considerably
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liitle
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little
more was
employment
status in
Japan
and USA. As can be seen from the second diagram, the amount of
employment
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less in double than
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,
also
the highest indicator is 43% and increased in all four
countries
but rose dramatically in
Japan
again. The period between 1970 and 2000
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a different growth and in 2000 the people who have a job from
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charts as they less than in 1970.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words countries, japan, employment with synonyms.
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