The chart below shows the expenditure on three categories among different age groups of people in Uk in 2004

The chart below shows the expenditure on three categories among different age groups of people in Uk in 2004
The line graph the amount of consumption
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three categories among
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five different age groups in the United Kingdom in 2004.
Overall
, during
this
year period, people who are older
76
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year
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remained the biggest spenders on
food
and
drink
, with all two other
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spending much less on them.
Whose
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under 30
spendt
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spent
spend
the least amount
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restourant
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restaurants
and
hotel
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hotels
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,
while
who
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older
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31
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as
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much as each other but their
the
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highest index is
food
and
drink
with 13%.
However
, from 61 to 75
their
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the highest indicator is 24%, it is noticed that from under 30 to 75 the entertainment only
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, but after 75
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fell sharply to 13%. The gap
food
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and
drink
in
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spending between these three statements had widened and considerably more money with spent in 76 and more. As can be seen from the graph, the lowest detector is restaurant and hotel in 61-75 with 2% the highest pointer is entertainment and
food
and
drink
3which 24% with two different aged people.
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