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The chart below shows the expenditure on three categories among different age groups of people in Uk in 2004

The chart below shows the expenditure on three categories among different age groups of people in Uk in 2004
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The line graph the amount of consumption
on
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 three categories among
with
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five different age groups in the United Kingdom in 2004.
Overall
, during
this
 year period, people who are older
76
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than 76
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year
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years
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 remained the biggest spenders on
food
 and
drink
, with all two other
indicator
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indicators
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 spending much less on them.
Whose
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Those
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 under 30
spendt
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spent
spend
 the least amount
of
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on
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restourant
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restaurants
 and
hotel
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hotels
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,
while
who
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those who
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older
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31
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than 31
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as
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 much as each other but their
the
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highest index is
food
 and
drink
 with 13%.
However
, from 61 to 75
their
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the highest indicator is 24%, it is noticed that from under 30 to 75 the entertainment only
growth
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, but after 75
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it
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 fell sharply to 13%. The gap
food
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 and
drink
in
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spending between these three statements had widened and considerably more money with spent in 76 and more. As can be seen from the graph, the lowest detector is restaurant and hotel in 61-75 with 2% the highest pointer is entertainment and
food
 and
drink
 3which 24% with two different aged people.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words food, drink with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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