Children usually want to play the same games and watch the same tv programs as their friends. Should Parents allow it or not? Give your opinion and examples from your experience.
it is argued that young
children
are wanted
to play Wrong verb form
want
the
old Correct article usage
apply
game
and Fix the agreement mistake
games
watching
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watch
the
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apply
movie
that they already Fix the agreement mistake
movies
watch
over and over again, with their close Wrong verb form
watched
friend
. In my opinion, I think Fix the agreement mistake
friends
parents
should encourage them to do want
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apply
every
they want because obtaining Correct pronoun usage
whatever
happy
childhood is Correct article usage
a happy
a
most significant Correct article usage
the
things
.
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thing
Fist
of all, as Correct your spelling
First
a
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children
a child
children
they love to involved
in their own world and they enjoy and Add a missing verb
be involved
fascinate
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are fascinated
to share
their Change preposition
by sharing
treasure
moments and Replace the word
treasured
things
, which they tought
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think
is
very engrossing to their friends who Correct subject-verb agreement
are
is
really close to them. It is because Correct subject-verb agreement
are
of
they have Change preposition
apply
passions
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the passions
to do
the same Change preposition
for doing
things
with
the person Change preposition
as
who
they love and Change the pronoun
whom
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are confortable
confortable
with, Correct your spelling
comfortable
that is
why they play and watch they
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what they
already done
. Add the auxiliary verb
did
have already done
Thus
, guardian
should Add an article
the guardian
a guardian
rooting
their ideals rather than interrupted Change the verb form
root
be rooting
sheerness
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the sheerness
childhood
. Change preposition
of childhood
For example
, parents
are always looking things
through Change preposition
at things
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the adults
adults
side, Change noun form
adults'
adult's
then
they neglecte
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neglected
neglect
children
's feelings. In
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As
the
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a
results
, Fix the agreement mistake
result
cause
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apply
the
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apply
adolescent
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adolescents
are
think that Unnecessary verb
apply
parents
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their parents
are
do not Unnecessary verb
apply
allowed
them to do the Wrong verb form
allow
things
that they want to do again and again.
Secondly
, parents
might be
ought to give permission to video Unnecessary verb
apply
game
Fix the agreement mistake
games
repeately
since it can accelerate Correct your spelling
repeatedly
children
's brain
to think more. Fix the agreement mistake
brains
Beceuse
when we Correct your spelling
Because
palying
or Correct your spelling
play
watching on
one Wrong verb form
watch
things
, we can reward another perspective Change to a singular noun
thing
base
on how much time Replace the word
based
that
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apply
you
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we
do
it. Verb problem
spend
For example
, when you watching
a movie you perhaps Wrong verb form
watch
loss
certain plots because of your weak Replace the word
lose
focusing
or you misunderstood the dialogues but when you watch Replace the word
focus
second
time you might be well understand what they want to convey. Correct article usage
a second
Therefore
, this
is an advantages
of Change the noun form
advantage
do
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doing
things
at least two to three times. Hence
, to stimulates
Wrong verb form
stimulate
children
curiosity, Change noun form
children's
parent
should courageous their Fix the agreement mistake
parents
children
to do the thing they prefer with the people they love.
In conclusion, every children
Change to a singular noun
child
need
Correct subject-verb agreement
needs
parents
' rooting and encouraging
to achieve their friendship goals with Replace the word
encouragement
thier
ideas, and in their Correct your spelling
their
confortable
way. Correct your spelling
comfortable
This
is also
the way that parents
are protect
Change the verb form
protect
children's
childhood and they can play and watch freely.Correct pronoun usage
their children's
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