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Some people dislike the change in the society and their own life and ones things to stay same what should change be regarded as positive

#people #dislike #change #society #life #ones
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Bible
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 part of everybody's life it's not everybody in braces with open
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arms
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arm
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 women being are bonded by cultural
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traditions
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tradition
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traditions
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 and routines which nobody wants to break easily
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apply
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this
mind sets
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mindset
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 of
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individuals
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individual
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individuals
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 dislike the
change
 and promote
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stereotypes
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stereotype
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stereotypes
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 I will discuss below why
change
 should be regarded as positive as people dislike the
change
 and continue same which might be
due to
 the hardship faced in the past life
specially
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 old generation individual ignore
change
 as they are connected to the society physically mentally and emotionally so any new topic regarding shifting houses is always rejected
in addition
change
 always posters growth of individual which is basic building blocks of society that
change
 has got
lot
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 of invention and Discovery as it is clearly visible that joining of
aviation
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the aviation
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 industry was just stand with
cycle
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a cycle
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 which is
to
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too
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 busy trucks truck everybody likes to impress the
change
additionally
 changes facility of progress and development so
its
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 will be regarded positively.
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logical structure
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relevant specific examples
Support your arguments with specific examples and elaborate on them. This will demonstrate your ability to provide relevant evidence for your claims.
task achievement
You demonstrate a willingness to address both sides of the argument. This shows a balanced approach to the topic.
clear comprehensive ideas
You have a good attempt at explaining why change should be regarded positively, mentioning growth, progress, and development.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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