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The charts below show the main reasons for study among students of different age groups and the amount of support they received from employers. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the main reasons for study among students of different age groups and the amount of support they received from employers. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The charts illustrate the reasons behind students' studying of five different
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 employers offered them.
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it is clear that
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while
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 the younger
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groups
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 pursue studying to achieve their career aims, that for the oldest group is to please themselves.
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, the lowest
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groups
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 received the highest
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. A great tendency towards studying in favour of their career is noticeable in the three first
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 (under 26, 26-29 and, 30-39) with 80%, 70%, and almost 60% of their population doing so, respectively. Meanwhile, half of those aged 40-49 studied out of interest and half for their professional prospects. In comparison, the oldest
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 saw a different picture with the majority of them studying for their interest at approximately 70%. In terms of the
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 they received, it was the highest in
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 youngest
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groups
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 at nearly 70% for the former and 60% for the latter.
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, those in the 30-39 and 40-49
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 got somewhat similar levels of
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 from 30% to 40%.
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, the highest
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 with just above 40%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words age, support, groups with synonyms.
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