In the future,people may no longer be able to pay for things in shops using cash.All payments may have to be made by card or using phones. Do you thibk this will happen one day? Why do you think some people might not be happy to give up using cash?

Nowadays,mobile phones play a pivotal role in
individual's
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life as it becomes immensely great for
payment
and other financial services.
According to
this
situation,
i
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think that it will remove
cash
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the cash
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payment
method very soon
while
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some people might not be
joyous
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happy
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with it.In
this
essay,
i
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will discuss
reasons
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the reasons
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behind it and
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the disatisfaction
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disatisfaction
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dissatisfaction
of some individuals towards
this
situation.
Firstly
,every
shops
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shop
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have
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has
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a digital
payment
method which allows everyone to pay cashless in case of emergency when they do not carry
cash
with them.
Secondly
,there is no fear of robbery in card
payment
,individual can
shops
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shop
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easily without brooding about
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the thief
a thief
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thief
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thieves
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.
For instance
,
google pay
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Google Pay
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becomes
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has become
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a significant app for everyone, whenever they go outside they don't have to think about carrying
cash
.
Lastly
,it has been proven beneficial not only
consumers
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for consumers
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but
also
for shopkeepers as they do not have to count
cash
and
payment
will
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in
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to
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their bank account directly.
However
,some people might not
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feel
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charm
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as they think it has some negative impacts as well.
Acording
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According
to them, paying
cash
is
better
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a better
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way
for shopping
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to shop
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and
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but
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it will
also
have some demerits
such
as one
can became
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becoming
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spendthrift as they can not feel the real
payment
while
using
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a cards
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cards
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card
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payments.
Moreover
,they
also
have
phobia
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a phobia
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of becoming
victim
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victims
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and fraud
while
doing online transactions.
For example
,some people have
became
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become
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victim
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victims
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about
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of
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robbery
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the robbery
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of
hefty
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a hefty
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amount
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amounts
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from their
account
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accounts
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.
To sum up
this
, every coin has two sides,these both have their own merits and demerits.But, drawbacks are negligible and one can use cards as
it
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they
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proves
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prove
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safe,fast and reliable for
payment
.
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Grammar
Work on sentence structure and grammar. There are numerous minor grammatical errors which detract from the overall clarity of the essay.
Task Response
ELaborate on main points with more specific examples and detailed explanations. This will provide better support for your arguments.
Task Achievement
The essay covers both sides of the argument, discussing the benefits of cashless payments and the concerns surrounding them.
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There is a clear introduction and conclusion, which helps to frame the discussion effectively.
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