Families who send their children to private schools should not be required to pay taxes that support the state education system. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
In the first place, we all recognize that private
school
is the only way to keep your children educated, unless you send them to government school
then
you will down them to the dump without any hope of rescue. Although
some private schools
are good enough, they still can't provide facilities to cope with their high charge, every year families afford dozens of monies to pay private school
expenses, therefore
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charge , so you have to pay another sum for participate . some people say that Families should assist the education
system
especially those who applied their children to private schools
, I think that opinion is totally unfair, especially what parents paid is not at all equivalent to what they got.
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