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Use the information and language from this lesson to answer this Writing Part 1 task. The chart below gives information about how people aged 25-34 are housed in the UK. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting on the main features,Do not give your opinion, just the facts and make comparisons where relevant.

Use the information and language from this lesson to answer this Writing Part 1 task. The chart below gives information about how people aged 25-34 are housed in the UK. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting on the main features,Do not give your opinion, just the facts and make comparisons where relevant.
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Nowadays,
people
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 prefer a fast and more convenient lifestyle mostly
due to
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 their work requirements.
This
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 bar chart is
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proof that working or
other external factor
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 can make a big impact on how
people
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 prefer their living
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methods
. The bar chart revealed significant shifts in homeownership and renting trends among
people
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 aged 25-34 in the UK between 2004 and 2014. Notably, the
percentage
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 of
homeowners
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 decreased
while
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 the
percentage
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 of
renters
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 increased. Over the decade, the
percentage
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 of
homeowners
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 among
people
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 aged 25-34 decreased,
while
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 the
percentage
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 of
renters
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 increased.
This
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 shift was so significant that by the end of the period,
renters
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 had surpassed
homeowners
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. The homeownership
rate
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 was approximately 58% in 2004, which was about 30% higher than the
rate
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 for
renters
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.
This
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rate
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 dipped slightly to about 56% in 2006
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 and
then
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 increased to 57% in 2007.
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, the
rate
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then
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 dropped significantly to almost 52% in 2011
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 and remained almost the same in 2012.
Finally
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, it continued to decline steadily to about 36% by the end of the period. In 2004, about 20% of
people
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 were renting, and
this
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 increased to around 33% in 2005 before remaining consistent in 2006.
However
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, over the next five years, the figure experienced significant steady growth, reaching around 41% in 2011. It remained stable in 2012 and
then
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 surged to 47% in 2014, surpassing the
rate
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 of
homeowners
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, percentage, homeowners, renters, rate with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 4 times.
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