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Use the information and language from this lesson to answer this Writing Part 1 task. The chart below gives information about how people aged 25-34 are housed in the UK. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting on the main features, Do not give your opinion, just the facts and make comparisons where relevant.

Use the information and language from this lesson to answer this Writing Part 1 task. The chart below gives information about how people aged 25-34 are housed in the UK. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting on the main features, Do not give your opinion, just the facts and make comparisons where relevant.
Nowadays, society prefers a fast and more convenient lifestyle, mostly
due to
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 their work requirements.
This
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 bar chart proves that working or other external factors can have a big impact on how people prefer their living methods. The bar chart revealed significant shifts in homeownership and renting trends among people aged 25-34 in the UK between 2004 and 2014. In
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 essay, I will conduct an analysis of housing change and the percentage of home ownership and rent in the UK between 2004 and 2014 from the ages of 25 to 34. Over the decade, the
rate
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 of homeowners among communities aged 25-34 decreased
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 the percentage of renters increased.
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 shift was so significant that by the end of the period, renters had surpassed homeowners. The homeownership
rate
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 was approximately 58% in 2004, which was about 30% higher than the
rate
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 for renters.
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rate
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 dipped slightly to about 56% in 2006 and
then
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 increased to 57% in 2007. Over time, the
rate
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then
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 dropped significantly to almost 52% in 2011 and remained almost the same in 2012.
Finally
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, it continued to decline steadily to about 36% by the end of the period. In 2004, about 20% of
this
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 population was renting, and it increased to around 33% in 2005 before remaining consistent in 2006.
However
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, over the next five years, the figure experienced significant and steady growth, reaching around 41% in 2011. It remained stable in 2012 and
then
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 surged to 47% in 2014, surpassing the
rate
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 of homeowners.
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 steady growth is a clear indication of the momentum of change in the housing market.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words rate with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 4 times.
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