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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The diagram below shows how rain water is collected and then treated to be used as drinking water in an Australian town. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words. Writing Task 1

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The diagram below shows how rain water is collected and then treated to be used as drinking water in an Australian town. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words. Writing Task 1
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The diagram depicts the process of transforming
the
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natural
rain
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rainwater
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water
to
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into
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 pure
water
 for
the
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domestic use in Australia.
Overall
, the
rain
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rainwater
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water
 collected by the roof ducts
are
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 undergone with few steps before they are been distributed to the houses as drinking
water
. First and foremost,
water
 is collected during the rainy seasons and the houses are equipped with drainage
system
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systems
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in
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 the aim of gathering
water
 and transporting
them
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it
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 to the filters.
Secondly
, the reached
water
 to the filters via large drain tubes
are
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 subjected to filtration. Once
water
 is physically filtered, they are poured into a large tank fo
Subsequently
, the stored
water
 is
withdrawed
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 to the
water
 treatment base, where
water
 is treated chemically, targeting it to be consumable for drinking purposes.
Finally
, after the laboratory
preparation
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 what is considered
as
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drinking
water
which
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is
then
 transported by the
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pipelines
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pipe lines
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pipelines
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 to the household levels for the consumption of the citizens
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words water with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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