Some people prefer to travel around town by car, while others prefer public transit such as bus, train or subway. Discuss both these positions and give your own opinion.
People
have different Use synonyms
way
of thinking about travelling , some of them would like to Fix the agreement mistake
ways
travel
Use synonyms
in
public Change preposition
by
transport
Use synonyms
while
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other
prefer to commute Fix the agreement mistake
others
in
their own Change preposition
on
while
. In Linking Words
this
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essay
I will discuss both the view and conclude with my opinion.
Add a comma
essay,
Firstly
, there is no doubt that public Linking Words
transport
is the best way of commuting from one place to another because Use synonyms
traveling
Change the spelling
travelling
in
government Change preposition
by
transport
is economical and Use synonyms
in
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addition
it Add a comma
addition,
also
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protect
our planet from air Change the verb form
protects
pollution
. Use synonyms
For instance
, In Linking Words
the
recent survey from Correct article usage
a
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the times
times
of India revealed that 80% of Capitalize word
Times
people
in Japan prefer to Use synonyms
travel
Use synonyms
in
public Change preposition
by
transport
to save their country from Use synonyms
pollution
so I believe Use synonyms
that is
why Japan has less Linking Words
pollution
Use synonyms
among
other countries.
Change preposition
than
On the other hand
, Some Linking Words
people
always prefer to Use synonyms
travel
in a car Use synonyms
while
roaming here and there. They find that Linking Words
traveling
in their own Change the spelling
travelling
vechile
is more comfortable and easy . Correct your spelling
vehicle
People
think that Use synonyms
traveling
Change the spelling
travelling
in
bus or Change preposition
by
in
any public Change preposition
on
transport
is more time consuming Use synonyms
thus
they have to wait in a long queue to board Linking Words
in
a bus . Change preposition
apply
However
,Linking Words
if
commuting in Correct word choice
apply
own
automobile is more Correct pronoun usage
their own
convienent
as they can choose music of their own choice music and routes as well. Correct your spelling
convenient
For
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Example
If I Add a comma
Example,
am going
to Wrong verb form
go
office
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the office
in
public Change preposition
on
transport
Use synonyms
the
it Remove the article
apply
took
almost one hour to reach Wrong verb form
takes
office
and in my own Correct article usage
the office
car
I Add a comma
car,
reached
Wrong verb form
reach
office
in twenty minutes. So Correct article usage
the office
traveling
in own automobile is more efficient as compared to public Change the spelling
travelling
transport
.
Use synonyms
To conclude
, To save our planet we should use Linking Words
opt
public Verb problem
apply
transport
Use synonyms
then
only we can get rid Linking Words
from
air Change preposition
of
pollution
. Use synonyms
This
is my suggestion to Linking Words
Correct article usage
the authority
authority
Fix the agreement mistake
authorities
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that
is increase the Correct pronoun usage
apply
buses
frequency and other facilities as well so that Fix the agreement mistake
bus
people
Use synonyms
should be
happy be Verb problem
are
travel
in public Use synonyms
vechile
.Correct your spelling
vehicles
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Grammar and Spelling
Pay more attention to grammar and spelling. Avoid small mistakes like 'way of thinking about travelling' (should be 'ways of thinking about traveling'), 'while other prefer' (should be 'while others prefer'), and 'took almost one hour to reach office' (should be 'takes almost an hour to reach the office').
Coherence
Your essay could be more coherent. Some of the transitions between ideas are a bit abrupt. Adding more transition words would improve the flow.
Support Examples
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Introduction
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Conclusion
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Task Achievement
You address both sides of the argument, providing a balanced view.
Coherence
Your essay has a clear introduction and conclusion, which frames your argument well.
Task Achievement
You have a clear opinion and you provide reasons for your stance.