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You have received an important document in a foreign language and you need it translated quickly. One of your friends knows this language. Write a letter to this friend. In your letter: - Tell him why the document is important. - Explain why you need it translated urgently. - Suggest to your friend how you will get the document to him.

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Dear Abdul, Hope you're doing fine. I'm writing
this
 letter to you as I have received an important document related to my work in a foreign
language
 and you need to help me translate it. Basically, the document is part of one urgent shipment for my client to Saudi Arabia, but as you know the
language
 priority for them is always in Arabic.
Moreover
, I've not received any
supportings
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supporting
 in English or any other
language
 that I am
failiar
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familiar
 with.
This
 is a very critical shipment as it is for one of their new
customer's
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 in Saudi Arabia, and for which they're expecting more business going forward which in return is going help us. It is the first time we are handling any shipment to Saudi Arabia for
this
 client, so at any cost we cannot manage to make any mistakes. I will arrange to courier
this
 document to your home address via DHL express service, and you should receive the documents
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by tomorrow morning. I'm sure you can help me
on
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this
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 since you're very fluent
with
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 the
language
and
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especially
it
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being
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 your
mother-tongue
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. Appreciate your assistance and
hoping
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 to see your reply soon. Thanks & Regards, Vipin Abraham
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coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph centers around a single main idea to improve clarity. For example, separate the explanation of the document's importance from the reason for its urgency.
task achievement
Review the text for minor grammatical and spelling errors, such as 'familiar' instead of 'faliar.' These small changes can make your writing more polished.
task achievement
The letter uses a suitable writing tone, which is both respectful and friendly, appropriate for addressing a friend.
coherence cohesion
The greeting and closing are well-structured and courteous, creating a strong start and finish to the letter.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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