The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The diagrams depict the
statistic
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about the distribution of locations that are used for dancing
classes
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in one of the towns in Australia and the number of students that participate in various types of
its
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classes
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, categorized based on their age group. The most used location for
classes
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is the private studios which percentage is 48%. It is followed by the other three locations which are far left behind, including 24% at school halls, 18% at community halls and
others area
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, and 10% at college-base studios. Ballet has the highest number of
participations
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with approximately 600 participants under 11 years old, and 300 teenagers
at
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the age range 11 to 16. Meanwhile, Tap
dance
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classes'
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classes
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participants are above 400 for every age group.
Lastly
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, Modern
dance
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classes
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has
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the greatest number of attendances at 500, with the major participants
are
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teenagers and 300 children.
To conclude
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, most
dance
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classes
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use private studios, with Ballet has become the most popular
dancing
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class followed by Modern
dance
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.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words classes, dance with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • attending
  • currently
  • location
  • variety
  • ballet
  • hip-hop
  • contemporary
  • jazz
  • venues
  • popularity
  • attendees
  • juxtaposing
  • correlating
  • proximity
  • cultural influences
  • trends
  • anomalies
  • monopoly
  • proportion
  • distribution
  • enrollment
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