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The bar chart below describes some changes about the percentage of people were born in Australia and who were born outside Australia living in urban, rural and town between 1995 and 2010.

The bar chart below describes some changes about the percentage of people were born in Australia and who were born outside Australia living in urban, rural and town between 1995 and 2010.
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The bar chart illustrates some changes in the proportion of residents born in
Australia
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 and inhabitants born in foreign living in urban, the countryside, and
towns
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 from 1995 to 2010. In general,
people
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 in cities tended to increase over time. Meanwhile, the population in two areas
such
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 as the countryside and
towns
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 decreased. Having looked at the given picture for more details, in 1995, the number of city dwellers born in
Australia
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 accounted for 50, lower than
people
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 born outside by 10.
Besides
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, the number of humans abroad in
towns
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 was 40, more than domestic
people
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 by nearly 7.
By contrast
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, the figure for rural
people
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 in
Australia
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 was 20, half more than residents abroad. In 2010, the two rates of
people
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 in
Australia
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 and inhabitants in foreign went down, but the rate of domestic humans in
towns
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 and the countryside was more than external
people
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 by 3 and 4, respectively.
In addition
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,
although
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 the domestic
people
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's percentage and external inhabitants's percentage in megacities increased, the rate of
people
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 born outside
Australia
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 was overweight.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words australia, towns, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • demographics
  • urbanization
  • migration patterns
  • population distribution
  • percentage points
  • growth rate
  • decline
  • trend analysis
  • socioeconomic factors
  • infrastructure development
  • rural exodus
  • census data
  • lifestyle changes
  • residential patterns
  • immigration policies
  • emigration
  • natural increase
  • birth rate
  • settlement patterns
  • push and pull factors
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