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The two graphs show the main sources of energy in the USA in the 1980s and the 1990s. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make

The two graphs show the main sources of energy in the USA in the 1980s and the 1990s. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make
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The pie charts provide key information about the basic sources of sources of energy in the United States of America in the 1980s and the 1990s. The units are measured in percentage.
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, it is clear from the graphs that oil had the largest proportion that
considered
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 the first and foremost source of energy in both decades.
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, the nuclear
Power
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 doubled from 5% in 1980 to 10% in 1990,
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 the hydroelectric power remained the same over the years.
According to
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 what is shown, in
natural
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the natural
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 gas field there was a
slightly
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 drop from 26% in 1980 to 25% in 1990.
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, the coal grew from 22 per cent to 27 per cent. In terms of the lowest amount of energy used over the period
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 hydroelectric power obviously.

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