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The graph shows the results of a survey of British public figures that people can recognise from their photographs. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph shows the results of a survey of British public figures that people can recognise from their photographs. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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This
 report derives from the above bar chart which enumerates four well-known
people
 in Britain namely, the queen, prime minister, chancellor, and mayor of London. And provides the percentages of
people
 who could recognise them by looking at their photos. As an initial overview, the tendency of knowing these famous characters is the same for
people
 who were aged from 41 to 60. Not only is
this
 point clear, but
also
, the most well-known person is the queen. Notably, all the
people
 who submitted that survey recognised the queen except some of them who were less than 20 years
.
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Additionally
, 90% of youths (21-40) knew the prime minister from his photo, as it is the highest proportion.
On the contrary
, only half of
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submitters
 who were less than 20 years old had the ability to recognize the prime minister. By looking at the results for the chancellor,
it is clear that
 the trend is the same for two categories which are
people
 between 41 and 60 and
people
 who are older than 60.
Moreover
, most of those who recognized the mayor of London were between 21 and 60. In contrast, only 40% of
people
 who were older than 60 recognized him.
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