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The bar graph shows the global sales (in billions of dollars) of different types of digital games between 2000 and 2006. Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar graph shows the global sales (in billions of dollars) of different types of digital games between 2000 and 2006. Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar graph illustrates
sales
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 in
billion
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dollars
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 of different versions of digital
games
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 globally from 2000 to 2006 in four categories Mobile
phone
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, Online, Console, and Handheld.
Initially
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, console game
sales
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 decreased slightly throughout the period. Starting at 6
billion
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dollars
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 in 2000, they fell to nearly 3
billion
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dollars
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 by 2006.
In contrast
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, handheld
games
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 saw a substantial increase in
sales
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, rising from approximately 12
billion
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dollars
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 in 2000 to 18
billion
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dollars
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 in 2006. There were no data on online
games
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 in 2000.
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, from 2001 to 2006, online game
sales
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 increased significantly, surpassing mobile
phone
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games
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 in 2006.
Sales
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 of mobile
phone
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games
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 began in 2002, starting at the same level as online
games
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. From 2003 to 2005, global revenue from mobile
phone
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games
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 exceeded that of online
games
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 and continued to rise.
Overall
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, except for console
games
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, all other types of digital
games
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 experienced growth to some extent.
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