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WRITING TASK 1 You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The chart below shows what Anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree course. The table shows the salaries of the anthropologists in work after five years. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make Write at least 150 words.

WRITING TASK 1 You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The chart below shows what Anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree course. The table shows the salaries of the anthropologists in work after five years. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make Write at least 150 words.
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The pie chart and the table provide key information about Anthropology graduates' destinations after
graduatian
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graduation
graduating
 from one university.
overall
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, it is clear from the chart that full-time
work
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 has the highest proportion of the destination.
In addition
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, the government sector has the largest percentage of the salary after five years of
work
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 reaching its peak
over
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of over
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 100 thousand
doller
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dollars
dollar
.
According to
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 what is shown, the first and foremost destination for the graduates was full-time
work
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.
Secondly
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, part-time
work
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 and unemployed come in the order at 15%, and 12%, respectively. Following that, full-time postgrad study and not known have the same proportion at 8%.
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, the lowest amount was for
part time
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part-time
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work
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 and postgrad study. In terms of salaries, the highest was for
government
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 sector,
next,
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freelance consultants at 40 per cent.
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, the private companies have the lowest salary after five years of
wark
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work
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 at 30%.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "finally".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words work with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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