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The maps below show Colwick Arts Centre in 2005 and today. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The maps below show Colwick Arts Centre in 2005 and today. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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These two maps show changes to the Clowick Art
centre
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Centre
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 between 2005 and today. We can see many changes that happened in
this
 area in comparison
by
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to
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 2005;
on the other hand
, we didn’t have some facilities there in
2005like
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2005 like
cafe
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a cafe
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 or cinema;but nowadays, we
haven
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have
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 them in our court. In the past, the concert hall was located in the middle of
site
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the site
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;but today, it’s on the
right hand
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right-hand
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 side of the courtyard.
Or
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For
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for
example
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example,
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 in the past the art gallery was divided into two parts;
however
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however,
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it
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there
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 is a big area
in
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on
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 the
left hand
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left-hand
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 side of the site. In the past,they didn’t use some areas of the site ; but today we can see some areas on the bottom of the map wich
is
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are
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 new for the outdoor exhibition. In
conclusion
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conclusion,
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 we have two different areas of a complex because of their needs in the time and it may change again in the future.
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Contractions: Don't use contractions.
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Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "show" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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