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The table shows the percentage of journeys made by different forms of transport in four countries. The bar graph shows the results of a survey into car use. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table shows the percentage of journeys made by different forms of transport in four countries. The bar graph shows the results of a survey into car use. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table illustrates the
percentage
 of journeys made by various forms of
transport
 in four countries
while
 the bar chart demonstrates the findings of a survey into
car
 use.
Overall
,
Although
Canada
 had the highest
percentage
on
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of
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the
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apply
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car
usage
, it had
very
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a very
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 low
percentage
in
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of
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 public means
whereas
Germany
 used public
transport
 the most.
However
,
Netherlands
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the Netherlands
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 had low
usage
 of cars as compared to the other states because they mostly used bicycles.
Further
,
Germany
 and Belgium had equal
percentage
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percentages
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on
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of
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 both bicycle
usage
 and
by
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foot.
On
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By
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 other means, all had equal
number
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numbers
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 apart from
Germany
. In
Canada
, most people used the cars because they had no
any
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apply
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other alternative and less
percentage
due to
 their attendance of night shift work.
Nonetheless
,
Canada
 led in
car
usage
 with 90% but only
few
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a few
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 people
that is
 3% used public means. In
Germany
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Germany,
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 public transportation was highly used
18
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by 18
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%.
Although
Netherlands
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the Netherlands
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 had low
car
usage
 47%, they had a high number of 26% in bicycle use.
Germany
 and Belgium had equal
percent
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percentages
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on
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of
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 bicycle use
as well as
 using foot as a means of
transport
. Those who used other types of
transport
all
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in all
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 the three countries had 1% apart from
Germany
 that had which had 3%. In
Canada
, the survey showed that cars were used the most 38
percent
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per cent
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 because people had no
any
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apply
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other option and only 18%
was
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were
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 used by those who worked on the night shift.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "although".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 80%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, transport, car, canada, usage, germany with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 5 times.
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