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The table shows the percentage of journeys made by different forms of transport in four countries. The bar graph shows the results of a survey into car use. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table shows the percentage of journeys made by different forms of transport in four countries. The bar graph shows the results of a survey into car use. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table illustrates the
percentage
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 of journeys made by various forms of
transport
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 in four countries
while
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 the bar chart demonstrates the findings of a survey into
car
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 use.
Overall
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,
Although
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Canada
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 had the highest
percentage
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on
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of
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the
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apply
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car
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usage
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, it had
very
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a very
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 low
percentage
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in
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of
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 public means
whereas
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Germany
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 used public
transport
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 the most.
However
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,
Netherlands
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the Netherlands
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 had low
usage
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 of cars as compared to the other states because they mostly used bicycles.
Further
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,
Germany
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 and Belgium had equal
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percentage
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percentages
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on
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of
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 both bicycle
usage
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 and
by
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apply
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foot.
On
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By
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 other means, all had equal
number
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numbers
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 apart from
Germany
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. In
Canada
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, most people used the cars because they had no
any
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apply
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other alternative and less
percentage
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due to
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 their attendance of night shift work.
Nonetheless
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,
Canada
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 led in
car
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usage
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 with 90% but only
few
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a few
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 people
that is
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 3% used public means. In
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Germany
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Germany,
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 public transportation was highly used
18
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by 18
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%.
Although
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Netherlands
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the Netherlands
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 had low
car
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usage
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 47%, they had a high number of 26% in bicycle use.
Germany
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 and Belgium had equal
percent
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percentages
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on
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of
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 bicycle use
as well as
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 using foot as a means of
transport
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. Those who used other types of
transport
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all
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in all
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 the three countries had 1% apart from
Germany
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 that had which had 3%. In
Canada
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, the survey showed that cars were used the most 38
percent
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per cent
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 because people had no
any
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apply
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other option and only 18%
was
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were
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 used by those who worked on the night shift.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "although".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 80%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, transport, car, canada, usage, germany with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 5 times.
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