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The maps below show an industrial area in the town of Norbiton, and planned future development of the site. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The maps below show an industrial area in the town of Norbiton, and planned future development of the site. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The two maps depict the comparison of
Norbiton
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place
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Place
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 before the renovation and the development plan after construction.
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, the existing
of
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industrial
area
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 of
Norbiton
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 will be rebuilt to be residential and public facilities. The first picture shows the current map of
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Norbiton
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the Norbiton
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 industrial region
in
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on
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 the east
side
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 of the city.
In
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 the north
side
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 of the
Norbiton
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, there is an extensive river that separates between the industrial district and farmland. In the
center
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 of
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Norbiton
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the Norbiton
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 zone, there is a roundabout and factories on the
side
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 of the
road
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. There are two branch roads from the
center
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, to the east which connects to another factory
area
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, and to the south
side
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area
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 that directs to the main
road
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 in the south of the map. The second picture illustrates the design of
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Norbiton
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the Norbiton
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 residential
neighborhood
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neighbourhood
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. There will be significant development in the centre path, which are new roundabout on the south
side
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 of the existing circle
road
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, and additional roads on the north and east of the ongoing roundabout. From the small circle
road
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, if we go to the north
side
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, there will be
medical
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a medical
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 centre
in
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on
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 the right
side
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 and shops
in
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on
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 the left
side
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. There will be a Northwest
road
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 that leads to
housing
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the housing
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area
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. On the south
side
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 of Big Circle
Road
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, there
are
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 another housing
area
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, school, and playground facilities. On the north, there is housing on the left
side
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 and if we go through, the
road
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 will continue across the river and lead to a new housing
area
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 in the middle of the farmland. In conclusion, the
Norbiton
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area
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 will be changing from a factory
area
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 to be residential
area
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 and its facilities.

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Linking words: Add more linking words.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words norbiton, area, side, road with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • industrial area
  • planned future development
  • factories
  • warehouses
  • railway line
  • shopping center
  • residential buildings
  • college
  • mixed-use zone
  • commercial
  • residential
  • educational
  • green spaces
  • pedestrian walkways
  • housing
  • community
  • retail services
  • revitalize
  • quality of life
  • vibrant
  • sustainable
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