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Your English-speaking friend who lives in your town has asked for your advice about learning a new sport. Write an email to your friend. In your email • recommend a new sport that would be suitable for your friend to learn • explain how your friend could learn this sport • suggest that you both learn this sport together.

#friend #lives #town #advice #sport #email
Dear Tim, Happy summer Tim! I went to the gym
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 evening and thought it would be great if we catch up
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new sport
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 summer. Well, I've planned something for you,
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 email. I would push you to get your hands dirty with my favourite game cricket. It is similar to baseball and often requires agility that you are already good at. There's a professional coaching centre down Quinpool
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, but I'd ask you to visit the park next week so that I can teach you the basics. Once you know the bits, you can
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hire a local coach who can train for cheap. I've some old cricket journals that I can throw in for you to get a
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 with the techniques. I'd be joining the coaching with you as well since I'm a little rusty on my bowling skills.
This
 way we can ask the coach to shave off a bit. I am sure it would be fun and scintillating, pull your socks up! Best wishes, David.
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Make sure to further elaborate on how cricket can be beneficial beyond agility, emphasizing other skills Tim may gain or enjoy.
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Try to include a more distinct and comprehensive introduction and conclusion to frame the email effectively.
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You have provided clear and comprehensive ideas about how Tim can learn cricket, including specific steps and resources.
coherence cohesion
The introduction and conclusion are present, making the email well-rounded.

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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • advice
  • recommend
  • suitable
  • learn
  • coach
  • lessons
  • tutorial videos
  • practice
  • tennis club
  • group
  • schedule
  • regularly
  • participants
  • tournaments
  • friendly matches
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