The diagrams below give information about the Eiffel Tower in Paris and an outline project to extend it underground. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown.

The diagrams below give information about the Eiffel Tower in Paris and an outline project to extend it underground.

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown.
The diagram illustrates the
Eiffel
Tower
in Paris and an explanation of a project to enlarge the
tower
. The most noticeable change from the diagram is that
Eiffel
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the Eiffel
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Towel will be higher with many facilities. Looking at the details, the
Eiffel
tower
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Tower
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is located in Paris near the Seine River and it is behind the Ecolo military. There are many buildings near Paris city
such
as
hotel
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hotels
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,
Museum
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museums
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and
plaza
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plazas
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. Conservely,
this
Eiffel
Tower
made of metal had 10.000 tons weight and 324 meters
height
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in height
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which
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it
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was completed with two platforms which have 57 and
the
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apply
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115 meters high from the ground and both platforms can be related by 1665 stairs. Regarding the outline project, inside of the
Eiffel
Tower
, two
lift
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lifts
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will be added on the left and right side.
Next,
there will be
on
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apply
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5 underground levels where the ticket office and access to the
tower
is
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are
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on the first level and
shop
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shops
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and restaurants are on the second
floors
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floor
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.
Finally
, there are cinema and museum on the third
levels
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level
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and
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the
thr
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the
fourth and fifth floors will be meant for parking a lots
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words eiffel, tower with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "diagram" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.

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