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The table below shows the number of temporary migrant worker in four countries in 2003 and 2006 and the number of these workers per 1,000 people in these countries in 2006. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows the number of temporary migrant worker in four countries in 2003 and 2006 and the number of these workers per 1,000 people in these countries in 2006. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table provides information concerning the quantity of short-term expat
labourer
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labourers
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 in four nations in 2003 and 2006
,
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apply
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 and the density per 1,000 people of these
staffs
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staff
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 in 2006. At first glance, it can clearly be seen that the
overall
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 number of temporary
foreigner
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foreign
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 employees
are
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is
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 inverse to the denseness.
For instance
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, the figure for
United
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the United
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State
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States
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 ranked first
throught
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through
throughout
 the given two years,
while
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 their solidity stood
last
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.
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, the figures for New Zealand were calculated at the lowest among data,
whereas
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 its solidness reached the highest. Starting with the number of workers who worked in Australia,
United
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the United
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 Kingdom, New Zealand and
United
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the United
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states
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States
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, the former two started at 152,000 and 137,000 in 2003 before it dramatically rose almost double to 219,000 and 266,000 respectively in 2006.
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, the latter two showed 65,000 and 577,000 in 2003 before
experienced
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experiencing
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a slight rise to 87,000 and 678,000
consequencely
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consequently
consequences
 in 2006. Moving on to
that
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the
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 figures of density per 1,000 people
of
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in
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 the USA, the UK, Australia and New Zealand, It presented 2.3, 4.4, 10.7 and 21.1 in that order.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • temporary migrant workers
  • trends
  • absolute numbers
  • per 1,000 people
  • growth rate
  • per capita
  • labor markets
  • economies
  • significant
  • imply
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