The pie charts give information about the proportion males and females in employment in six categories divided into manual and non-manual occupations

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The two pie charts provide data about the percentage of

men

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and

women

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in work in varied six sections split into parts automated and non-automated professions. Looking from an

overall

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perspective, it is readily apparent that both genders are more specialized in non-automatic jobs.

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women

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are superior in clerical or related work,

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men

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excell

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excel

at managerial and professional occupations. Craft or similar and general labourers which are manual employment stand at almost the same rate between

women

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and

men

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. The proportion of

women

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make

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makes

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up just under one

thrid

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third

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in clerical or related, followed by

manegerial

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managerial

and professional and craft or similar, which amount to 29% and just above a quarter. Other

non manual

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, other manual and general labourers are chosen for work relatively less just under

one tenth

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, 3% and 1%, respectively. Managerial and professional leads the way for

men

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in all employment with 36%, followed by other manual jobs and craft or similar, which account for just above a quarter and just under a quarter. Clerical or related and other

non manual

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professions are chosen at the same rate for

men

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however

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however,

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general labourers comprise just 1% of all

employes

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employees

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Vocabulary: Replace the words men, women with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: The word "just under" was used 3 times.

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4
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meeting the goal of 7 or more
2
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

194 words

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