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You are moving out of your rental apartment. Write a letter to your neighbour to say goodbye. In your letter say 1. when and where do you move? 2. why do you move out? 3. how do you feel about it?

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Dear Mr Johnson, I am writing
this
 letter to inform you about moving out of your rental flat in June24. I will be moving to Hills bury Gardens. As I have been promoted by my employer and they told me to relocate to nearby
office
 areas.
Furthermore
,
exact
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 date of relocation is not yet confirmed,but
tentively
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tentatively
 by 12th of
June
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June,
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this
 year will be
date
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the date
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 of relocation.My
office
 timings
also
 have been changed and now I have to report in
office
 at 8.30 am. It will take one hour to reach
office
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 from here and the traffic jams are
common
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 sight, which can delay my reporting time.
However
, I am always remembering my time
spend
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in
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 your property. As you take care of us just like your family. I have not faced any issues in
past
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 two years during my stay here. Hope to meet you in future. Yours Sincerely Justin Waugh
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coherence
Ensure that all sentences are grammatically correct and coherent, such as 'moving out of my rental flat' instead of 'moving out of your rental flat.'
task achievement
Provide a clearer explanation or a more detailed reason for moving out to fulfill the task requirements better.
greeting and closing
The closing of the letter is courteous and maintains a polite tone, which is important in a farewell letter.
single idea per paragraph
Each paragraph generally focuses on a single idea, making it easier for the reader to follow.
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