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you recently bought a piece of equipment for your kitchen but it did not work. you phoned the shop but no action was taken. write a letter to the shop manager.in your letter : -describe the problem with the equipment - explain what happened when you phoned the shop - say what you would like the manager to do

#piece #equipment #kitchen #work #shop #action #manager #-describe
Iam
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I am
 writing
this
 letter in order to complain as your product was out of order beside your customer's services did not respond to my several calls. 2 days ago I bought a microwave from your company's shop but
whan
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when
 I came home and
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 it in I
realixed
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realised
realized
this
 equipment did not work. I tried again number of times and read
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the instraction
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instraction
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instruction
instructions
 more and more but did not start working.
when
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this
 situation happened to me I made
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 mind to call the customer's services and ask them
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 replace
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microwave or refund my money , but
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they
 did not answer my phone, so I decided to write
this
 letter to you as a head manager. I hope you
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consider
this
 urgent matter and call me back as soon as possible.
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spelling error
Check for spelling and grammatical errors to improve clarity and professionalism. For example, 'realixed' should be 'realized' and 'instraction' should be 'instruction.'
clarity
Provide more specific details about your purchase to enhance the clarity of your complaint. For example, mention the model or type of microwave.
structure
Consider structuring your letter into clear paragraphs to address each point separately. This will improve readability and coherence.
clarity
The letter is clear and direct in addressing the problem and desired resolution.
tone
The tone remains polite and professional despite the complaint, which is appropriate for formal communication with a shop manager.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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