you recently bought a piece of equipment for your kitchen but it did not work. you phoned the shop but no action was taken. write a letter to the shop manager.in your letter : -describe the problem with the equipment - explain what happened when you phoned the shop - say what you would like the manager to do

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I am

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letter in order to complain as your product was out of order beside your customer's services did not respond to my several calls. 2 days ago I bought a microwave from your company's shop but

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I came home and

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equipment did not work. I tried again number of times and read

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instruction

instructions

more and more but did not start working.

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mind to call the customer's services and ask them

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microwave or refund my money , but

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letter to you as a head manager. I hope you

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consider

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urgent matter and call me back as soon as possible.

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spelling error

Check for spelling and grammatical errors to improve clarity and professionalism. For example, 'realixed' should be 'realized' and 'instraction' should be 'instruction.'

clarity

Provide more specific details about your purchase to enhance the clarity of your complaint. For example, mention the model or type of microwave.

structure

Consider structuring your letter into clear paragraphs to address each point separately. This will improve readability and coherence.

clarity

The letter is clear and direct in addressing the problem and desired resolution.

tone

The tone remains polite and professional despite the complaint, which is appropriate for formal communication with a shop manager.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

130 words

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