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The graph below shows the production levels of the main kinds of fuel in the UK between 1981 and 2000.Summarize the formation byselectingand reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the production levels of the main kinds of fuel in the UK between 1981 and 2000.Summarize the formation byselectingand reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The chart illustrates the output of petroleum, coal and natural gas in the UK from 1981 to 2000. It's obvious that
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the year
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1991 was a big turning point for these three kinds of fuel
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 since all of them had huge differences after the year. From 1981 and 2000, petroleum showed a
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production
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 level among these three kinds of fuel, though it experienced some fluctuation during
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 period. In 1981 the
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 of petroleum kept a significant upward trend until 1984
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 and
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 at around 140
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 from 1984 to 1987.
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 it dramatically
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 to 100
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 in 1990. And after
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 the
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 bounced back at around 1991
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 and had
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 the rest of the years. The
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 of coal and natural gas seems steadier between 1981 and 1991. Except for a sudden drop
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 coal, which was from 80 to about 36
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 it quickly
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 to about 60
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1986, and
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 the following years until 1991, the
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 is steady but a small decrease from 1989 to 1991. After 1991 the
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 of
these two fuel
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 showed
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 tendencies,
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 natural gas substantially climbed up and surpassed the
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 of coal,
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 coal still suffered a decline
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 the rest of the period.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words production, energy, units with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "differences" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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