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The line graph illustrates the production level of the three main fuels in the United Kindom (petroleum, coal, natural gas) in 19 years from 1981 to 2000.

The line graph illustrates the production level of the three main fuels in the United Kindom (petroleum, coal, natural gas) in 19 years from 1981 to 2000.
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The given Chart provides an about the
production
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 of three types of
energy
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 fuels including coal, natural
Gas
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, and petroleum in the UK throughout a period between 1981 and 2000.Units are measured by millions of
tonnes
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.
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, the largest
production
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level
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 was petroleum
energy
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 among all types of
energy
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.
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, petrol
energy
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 and natural
gas
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 show an upward trend over
this
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 period.
while
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,
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 coal had a downward trend.
Petroluem
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Petroleum
energy
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 commenced at 70
million
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tonnes
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 in 1981,
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 increased dramatically to 140
million
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tonnes
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 in1983. After that, there was no change in the
production
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 until 1987.
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 ,declined on
this
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 type of
energy
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 to 100 in 1991. Between 1991 and 2000, the
production
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 of petroleum
energy
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 increased gradually to 140
million
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 tons throughout the
last
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 six years.
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, the natural
gas
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level
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initialed
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 at 40
million
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tonnes
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,
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 and remained steady at the same target in the year 1991.
Following
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this
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, a line of up line was observed at the natural
gas
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level
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 from 80 to 1000
million
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tonnes
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 in the two years 1996, and 2000 respectively. Regarding
to
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coal
production
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, it started at around 80
million
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tonnes
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 and stayed without any change before dropping to half (40
million
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tonnes
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) in 1983. In the following years, a gradual decline was detected in the
energy
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level
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 of coal.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "moreover".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words production, energy, gas, tonnes, level, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.
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