Some people say History is one of the most important school subjects. Other people think that, in today's world, subjects like Science and Technology are more important than History. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Nowadays,
people
have
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controversial
opinion
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opinions
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about
history
and other subjects like
science
and
technology
.
While
some
people
think that
history
is the most important
subject
in schools, other
people
consider
science
and
technology
as more important subjects. Well, I believe that both subjects are important and they support different aspects
in
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the human being.
History
is an important
subject
everywhere, it represents the identity of every
individuals
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.
History
is the reason
of
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how
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why
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people
knows
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their hometown, origin, culture and traditions. Schools
teaches
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history
to explain how and why every country in the world
exist
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, and why they
were
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given these names currently. In order for the next generations not to forget about their
history
,
this
important
subject
must be continuously taught everywhere.
On the other hand
,
science
and
technology
are more important these days
due to
the
technology
evolution worldwide. In universities and
carrier
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career
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field
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fields
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, the focus is on the person who has
technology based
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skills
such
as programming, robotics, or any invention related to
science
in order to solve any issue in our world.
In addition
, students think of their
long term
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long-term
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plan
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plans
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after graduation,
that
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and
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most of them are going to apply for
technology
or
science based
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science-based
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major
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majors
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due to
the wide verities
in
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jobs opportunity and high salary ranges in these
field
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fields
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in comparison with
history
.
To conclude
, I can understand why some
people
chose
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choose
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history
as an important
subject
while
other
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others
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seas
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say
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that
science
and
technology
as more important, but I think that they both are highly important to students for their personal and scientific growth.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • crucial
  • comprehend
  • retrospect
  • gain insights
  • reflect on
  • sharpen
  • evaluate
  • significance
  • heritage
  • legacy
  • advent
  • breakthroughs
  • sustain
  • sustainability
  • revolutions
  • empowered
  • overcome
  • transform
  • advancements
  • collaboration
  • cooperation
  • diversity
  • fulfilling
  • promote
  • facilitate
  • prosperity
  • enhance
  • foster
  • foundation
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