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The table below shows the proportion of different categories of families living in poverty in Australia in 1999.

The table below shows the proportion of different categories of families living in poverty in Australia in 1999.
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The chart below illustrates the percentage of various items of people who live in Australia living in
poverty
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 in the year 1999.
It is clear that
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 single no
children
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 and sole parents saw the highest proportion of living in
poverty
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while
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 aged
couples
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 and single aged person were the lowest percentage of society who lived in
poverty
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. In detail, the whole proportion of people who were poor was about 11 per cent ( 1837000 million). The figure for the single aged person who living in
poverty
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 stood at approximately a fifth.
However
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, these figures for single without
children
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 and sole parents were higher at 19% and 21% respectively.
In addition
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,
couples
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 with
children
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 accounted for the third highest proportion of living in
poverty
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 about more than one in ten. The figure for the aged
couples
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 who had poor life, stood at less than a fifth,
whereas
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 that of
couples
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 with no
children
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 was higher at 7 per cent.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words poverty, children, couples with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stood" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • proportion
  • categories
  • families
  • poverty
  • single-parent
  • childcare
  • income
  • couples
  • dependents
  • older adults
  • pensions
  • unemployed
  • financial resources
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