Food travels thousands of miles from farms to consumers. some people believe we should buy food from local farmer to protect the environment and support local businesses. do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

Nowadays, under the development of delivery
system
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systems
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, local specialities are able to be shipped to everywhere just by an online order.
Therefore
, tons of plastic for
item's packings
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items
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are released to harm our environment. I firmly believe that buying
food
directly from local
farmer
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farmers
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would bring many positive impacts to encourage the indigenous economy. It is evident that the demand
of
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food
delivery and cargo is more and more higher for the
last
ten years. It
also
means that we are wasting a lot of money
for
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plastic
packings
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packing
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, transportation fuel,
even
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and even
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the preservative
subtains
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sustains
.
As a result
, our environment has been gradually destroyed by the
big
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amount of disintegrated garbage,
the
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air pollution, and our health has been endangered by eating too much of
chemiscal
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chemical
preservatives.
For instance
, annually there is about 500 million tons of US cherry are shipped to Vietnam, estimated about 10 tons of packing items and 50 litters of
chemiscal
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chemical
chemicals
subtains
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sustains
are needed to use. Those expenses are much
more
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higher than local
farmer
's
benefit
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benefits
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.
Instead
of
food
travelling to customers, why not customers coming to local
food
? Obviously,
this
point would bring more
directly
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benefit
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benefits
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for local people. Not only increasing income for
food
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industry but
also
creat
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create
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more jobs for tourism.
For example
, the new trend of homestay
tour
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tours
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that make
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travellers have chance to come and stay with
the
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friendly
farmer
family
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families
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, to experience
to cook
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cooking
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local
food
, to taste fresh fruits from local gardens and
learn
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to learn
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more about local culture. In
this
way, local
farmer
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farmers
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and
comsumers
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consumers
consumer
are happy. In conclusion, I support that we should experience the local
food
at the place where it comes from. It is the best way to support the local economy and save our environment.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • carbon footprint
  • local economy
  • self-sustainability
  • preservatives
  • food waste
  • biodiversity
  • ecosystems
  • monoculture
  • local produce
  • nutritional value
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