The map below is of the town of Garlsdon. A new supermarket (S) is planned for the town. The map shows two possible sites for the supermarket. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

The map below is of the town of Garlsdon. A new supermarket (S) is planned for the town. The map shows two possible sites for the supermarket.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

You should write at least 150 words.
The given map illustrates the
town
area
of Garlsdon where a novel
supermarket
is planned, it proposed two suitable sites for the
supermarket
construction planning namely S1 and S2.
Overall
, it can be seen that both sites are
accesible
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accessible
by train and main roads.
To begin
with, looking at the
first
possible
site
, it is located in the
north west
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northwest
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of the
area
, making it close to two areas which are Hindon that only 12 km far from it, and Garlsdon. It is easy for communities to travel to the other areas by train and through main roads.
Additionally
, there is a housing
area
in the north of the
town
that
close
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is close
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to the
first
planned
supermarket
. Moving to the second suitable
site
.
In contrast
to the
first
site
that
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apply
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placed
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located
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in the rural
area
, it is situated in the center of the
town
, which
allow
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allows
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residents to access many different ways to reach another
town
namely Bransdon and Cransdon
that
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apply
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calculated 16 km and 25 km away respectively.
Smiliarly
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Similarly
to the
first
supermarket
planned point, it has access to
train
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the train
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and main roads that facilitate the locals for commuting.
Moreover
, compared with the
first
site
,
this
future
supermarket
will be placed even nearer to the housing
area
which is located in the south of it.
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words town, area, supermarket, first, site with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • map
  • town
  • supermarket
  • site
  • overview
  • possible
  • transportation
  • access
  • surrounding
  • facilities
  • population
  • density
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