The chart below show the average percentage in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant

The chart below show the average percentage in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant
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There are numerous types of meals consumed in the USA. In
these meal
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this meal
these meals
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contain many ingredients
such
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as
sodium
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, saturated
fats
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and added sugars. These graphs show the
amount
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of these three nutrients in between the four times of eating. Let's start with
sodium
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, in breakfast the
amount
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of
sodium
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intake is 14%, same with the
snacks
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eaten
which
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with
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the
amount
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of
sodium
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is
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being
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14%. The most
amount
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of
sodium
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consumed is at
dinner
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at 43%,
while
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the second most
amount
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of
sodium
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consumed is at lunch at 29%.
Next,
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there
is
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are
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Saturated
fats
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. Saturated
fats
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is
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are
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mostly consumed at
dinner
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at
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with
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37% of it consumed
at
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apply
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there.
Then
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comes
at
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apply
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lunch and
dinner
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where they are at 26% and 16% respectively and 21% for
snacks
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.
Moreover
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, for Added
sugars
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sugars,
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the
amount
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of sugars consumed the most is at
snacks
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at a whopping 42%. Which belittles the
amount
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of
sodium
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or saturated
fats
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consumed
on
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in
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snacks
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. To continue, there are 16% for breakfast, 19% for lunch and 23% for
dinner
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. To summarize the
amount
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of
Sodium
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consumed
is
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apply
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peak
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peaks
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during
dinner
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same as the
amount
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of saturated fat which is the most at
dinner
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,
while
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the added sugar is mostly taken during
snacks
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words sodium, fats, amount, snacks, dinner with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "show" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 9 times.
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