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The charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate student who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate student who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar charts
compares
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 the job type other than full-time
work
 between the United Kingdom graduates and postgraduates in 2008.
Overall
, the majority of both
population
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populations
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 chose to advance their
study
 after graduation whilst
the
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both
population
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populations
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shows
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 little interest
on
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in
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 voluntary
work
. For United Kingdom graduates, most of the graduates opted to
study
post graduate
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postgraduate
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study
 after graduation. The second most prevalent job selection is part-time
work
, but it
only
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 accountable to half the
population
 than that in
further
study
. Only less than
one tenth
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 of the
population
 picked voluntary
work
 as their career path. For United Kingdom post-graduates,
although
 the advancement of
study
 is still the most popular option, the
population
 of people who opted
part-time
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for part-time
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work
 is comparable with only 200 people difference. Volunteering is the least popular among all, which only contains less than 400 people.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words work, population, study with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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