the chart below shows the value of one country's exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage changes in each caterogry of exports in 2016 compared 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reproting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

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The chart shows the difference in

amount

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the amount

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of one country's exports in different

kind

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kinds

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of categories in 2015 and 2016. There is

also

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a information

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information

a piece of information

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that shows the percentage difference in every

category

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of exports in 2016 compared to 2015. Most export

earnings

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come from petroleum

products

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in both years.

On the other hand

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textiles

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are

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always the lowest in all years. The highest amount of export

earnings

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in 2015 and 2016 is about $60

billions

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billion

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which is petroleum

products

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Next,

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the second highest is

the

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apply

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engineered goods where in 2016 it

gave

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had

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higher

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a higher

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impact on money from the largest

earnings

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. To add it up, the two smallest

earnings

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have about the same

earnings

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in 2016,

while

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in 2015 it

have

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a very huge gap. Agricultural

products

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only

have

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had

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little

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small

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increase,

while

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textiles

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have

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had

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a huge increase causing both of the categories to be about the same in 2016. In the middle of it, there

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are

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gems and

jewellry

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jewellery

which donates about $40

billions

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billion

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in 2015 and 2016. The highest percentage change in values is for

textiles

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where

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which

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apply

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increases by 15.24% and the lowest is

agricultural

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for agricultural

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products

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which

decreases

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decrease

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by 5.18%.

However

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, the least money that the country

get

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gets

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is from

textiles

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".

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Vocabulary: Replace the words earnings, products, textiles with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.

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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "difference" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 4 times.

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Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
3
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

3 paragraphs

204 words

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