the chart below shows the value of one country's exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage changes in each caterogry of exports in 2016 compared 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reproting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

the chart below shows the value of one country's exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage changes in each caterogry of exports in 2016 compared 2015. 

Summarise the information by selecting and reproting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The chart shows the difference in
amount
Add an article
the amount
show examples
of one country's exports in different
kind
Fix the agreement mistake
kinds
show examples
of categories in 2015 and 2016. There is
also
a information
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information
a piece of information
show examples
that shows the percentage difference in every
categories
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category
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of exports in 2016 compared to 2015. Most export
earnings
come from petroleum
products
in both years.
On the other hand
,
textiles
is
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are
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always the lowest in all years. The highest amount of export
earnings
in 2015 and 2016 is about $60
billions
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billion
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which is petroleum
products
.
Next,
the second highest is
the
Correct article usage
apply
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engineered goods where in 2016 it
gave
Verb problem
had
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higher
Correct article usage
a higher
show examples
impact on money from the largest
earnings
. To add it up, the two smallest
earnings
have about the same
earnings
in 2016,
while
in 2015 it
have
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has
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a very huge gap. Agricultural
products
only
have
Wrong verb form
had
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a
little
Correct word choice
small
show examples
increase,
while
textiles
have
Wrong verb form
had
show examples
a huge increase causing both of the categories to be about the same in 2016. In the middle of it, there
is
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are
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gems and
jewellry
Correct your spelling
jewellery
which donates about $40
billions
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billion
show examples
in 2015 and 2016. The highest percentage change in values is for
textiles
where
Correct word choice
which
show examples
it
Correct pronoun usage
apply
show examples
increases by 15.24% and the lowest is
agricultural
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for agricultural
show examples
products
which
decreases
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decrease
show examples
by 5.18%.
However
, the least money that the country
get
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gets
show examples
is from
textiles
.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words earnings, products, textiles with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "difference" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 4 times.

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