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The chart below shows the total number of hours per month from 1980 to 2015 that people in the USA used modern technology divided into four categories. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The given line graph illustrates the monthly hours spent by people in the USA using modern technology from 2000 to 2015.
Overall
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, there was a significant increase in the
usage
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 of phones,
while
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 the use of radios saw a substantial decline over the period.
To begin
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 with,
it is clear that
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 the
usage
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 of phones increased dramatically. In 2000, the average time spent on phones was relatively low.
However
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, over the next 15 years, there was a steady and substantial rise, with phone
usage
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 increasing by 80%. Moving ahead, the use of radios showed the opposite trend. In 2000, radio
usage
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 was quite high, but it decreased steadily over the years. By 2015, the time spent on radios had dropped by 75%.
Hence
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, the
overall
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usage
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 of modern technology increased significantly from 2000 to 2015, with phone
usage
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 rising sharply and radio
usage
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 declining considerably.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words usage with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "substantial" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • modern technology
  • significant increase
  • notable milestone
  • growth rate
  • usage patterns
  • comparative analysis
  • fluctuations
  • exponential growth
  • steady rise
  • decline
  • peak
  • trend
  • data analysis
  • overall trend
  • compared to
  • demonstrate
  • illustrate
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