The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart provides an overview of the proportion of Australian men and women across various
age
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groups who engaged in regular physical activity in the year 2010.
Overall
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, it is evident that female
participation
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rates generally exceeded those of males, except in the youngest
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group.
To begin
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with, in the
age
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group 15-24, male
participation
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stood at 52.8%, slightly surpassing that of females at 47.7%.
However
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,
this
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pattern reversed in subsequent
age
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brackets. From ages 25 to 44, male engagement in physical activity steadily declined, reaching its lowest point of 39.5% among those aged 35-44.
In contrast
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, female
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showed a gradual increase across these
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groups, peaking at 50.3% for those aged 45-54. Moving to the older
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categories, both genders exhibited a decline in physical activity levels. Males aged 55-64 and over 65 reported
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rates of 45.1% and approximately 46.7% respectively,
while
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females in these
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brackets showed rates of around 47.1% and 53%, with the latter being the highest recorded among all
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groups.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words age, participation with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Percentage
  • Australian men
  • Australian women
  • Age groups
  • Regular physical activity
  • Participated
  • Increased
  • Decreased
  • Proportion
  • Physically active
  • Gender difference
  • Engaged
  • Exercise
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