The diagram illustrates the process that is used to manufacture bricks for building industry. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The diagram explains the way in which
bricks
are made for the building industry. Use synonyms
Overall
, there are seven stages in the Linking Words
process
, beginning with the digging up of Use synonyms
clay
and culminating in delivery.
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To begin
, the Linking Words
clay
used to make the Use synonyms
bricks
is dug up from the ground by a large digger. Use synonyms
This
Linking Words
clay
is Use synonyms
then
placed onto a metal grid, which is used to break up the Linking Words
clay
into smaller pieces. A roller assists in Use synonyms
this
Linking Words
process
.
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Following
Linking Words
this
, sand and water are added to the Linking Words
clay
, and Use synonyms
this
mixture is turned into Linking Words
bricks
by either placing it into a mould or using a wire cutter. Use synonyms
Next,
these Linking Words
bricks
are placed in an oven to dry for 24 – 48 hours.
In the subsequent stage, the Use synonyms
bricks
go through a heating and cooling Use synonyms
process
. They are heated in a kiln at a moderate and Use synonyms
then
a high temperature (ranging from 200c to 1300c), followed by a cooling Linking Words
process
in a chamber for 2 – 3 days. Use synonyms
Finally
, the Linking Words
bricks
are packed and delivered to their destinations.Use synonyms
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