The provided bar chart depicts the changes in the percentage of overweight males and females in Australia over a thirty-year period, from 1980 to 2010.
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men
and women in Australia Use synonyms
across
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from
the
1980 to 2010.
It is clearly shown that the percentage of Change the article
apply
obese
population is slowly rising over the years with higher Correct article usage
the obese
prevenlence
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prevalence
on
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among
men
.
For Use synonyms
men
, there were exactly 40% of overweight Use synonyms
men
in 1980 which climbed up sharply to over 60% in 2000, Use synonyms
then
it dropped slightly but still maintained a high percentage of 60% in 2010.
For women, the proportion of women having the weight problem is Linking Words
noticebly
smaller than that compared to the Correct your spelling
noticeably
men
across the years. It started off with approximately a quarter of the population in 1980, rising rapidly to Use synonyms
overly
half of the population in 2000. It has remained static at over 50% since 2000.Change the word
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