The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane. 

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. 

Write at least 150 words.
The diagram process below displays the way sugar is produced
Firstly
,
this
manufacture begins with a herb called
a
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sugarcane. It grows from one to one and a half years.
Then
, the farmers collect these sugarcanes. After that, these plants
be
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crushed and transformed into
a
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juice.
This
natural spirit is dirty enough to make it unhealthy, so it goes through a limestone filter. With the help of a heater,
this
clear liquid becomes a syrup. Tiny
sugar-crystals
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, inside of that sirup,
is
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separated from an actual substance.
Finally
, after all of
this
procedure, these saccharose molecules get dried and cooled down.
This
results in receiving
a
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sweet sand.
Overall
, there are seven steps, which are growing, harvesting, crushing, purifying juice, evaporating, separating sugar crystals from syrup, drying and cooling. There are some equipment, which are crusher, limestone filter, evaporator
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etc. There is only one resource, which is sugarcane.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • manufacturing process
  • sugar cane
  • harvesting
  • transporting
  • factory
  • crushing
  • extracting
  • juice
  • filtering
  • impurities
  • heating
  • evaporating
  • syrup
  • boiling
  • crystallizing
  • sugar
  • separating
  • drying
  • packaging
  • distribution
  • stage
  • process
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