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The chart illustrates the comparison of various types of energy generation in France namely coal, gas, petro, nuclear and the other energy over the period of 10 years starting in 1995.

The chart illustrates the comparison of various types of energy generation in France namely coal, gas, petro, nuclear and the other energy over the period of 10 years starting in 1995.
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The pie chart compares the
differant
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different
 types of
energy
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 generation in France namely
cola
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coal
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,
gas
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,
petro
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, nuclear and
the
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apply
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other
energy
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 during the period of 10 years ago which
ia
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is
start
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started
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 in 1995.
It is clear that
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the
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apply
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gas
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producation
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production
 was
the
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apply
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higher than
others
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other
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energy
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.
By
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contrast
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contrast,
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 the other
energy
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were
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was
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 the lower than other.
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,in between
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this
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these
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 two
years
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years,
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 the
gas
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produce
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produced
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 was higher than
gas
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 in the
year
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 1995.
Also
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,in 2005 the coal was higher than coal in 1995.
Besides
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,in 1995 the nuclear and other
procduction
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production
productions
 were
decrese
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decreased
 than
other
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another
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year
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.
However
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,in 1995 the
petro
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 reached
up to
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apply
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29.27% lower than
2005
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in 2005
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 reached 19.55%.
Furthermore
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,in 2005 the Nuclear was higher
reached
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reaching
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 up to 10.10% rather than
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in other
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other
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another
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year
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years
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 which
is reach
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reached
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 up to 6.40%.
In addition
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,in 1995 the
petro
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 was higher than
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petro
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the
 other
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year
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years
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which
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apply
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reached
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reaching
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 up to 29.27%.
Moreover
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,in both years the
percentage
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percentages
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between
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of
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 coal all
most
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apply
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near each
others
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other
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 which is higher
.
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while
while
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other
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the other
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 percentage of
energy
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 production was
lowest
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the lowest
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words energy, gas, petro, year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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