The chart illustrates the comparison of various types of energy generation in France namely coal, gas, petro, nuclear and the other energy over the period of 10 years starting in 1995.

The chart illustrates the comparison of various types of energy generation in France namely coal, gas, petro, nuclear and the other energy over the period of 10 years starting in 1995.
The pie chart compares the
differant
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different
types of
energy
generation in France namely
cola
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coal
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,
gas
,
petro
, nuclear and
the
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apply
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other
energy
during the period of 10 years ago which
ia
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is
start
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started
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in 1995.
It is clear that
the
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apply
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gas
producation
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production
was
the
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apply
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higher than
others
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other
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energy
.
By
contrast
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contrast,
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the other
energy
were
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was
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the lower than other.
On the other hand
,in between
this
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these
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two
years
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years,
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the
gas
produce
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produced
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was higher than
gas
in the
year
1995.
Also
,in 2005 the coal was higher than coal in 1995.
Besides
,in 1995 the nuclear and other
procduction
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production
productions
were
decrese
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decreased
than
other
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another
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year
.
However
,in 1995 the
petro
reached
up to
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29.27% lower than
2005
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in 2005
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reached 19.55%.
Furthermore
,in 2005 the Nuclear was higher
reached
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reaching
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up to 10.10% rather than
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in other
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other
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another
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year
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years
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which
is reach
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reached
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up to 6.40%.
In addition
,in 1995 the
petro
was higher than
petro
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the
other
year
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years
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which
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apply
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reached
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reaching
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up to 29.27%.
Moreover
,in both years the
percentage
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percentages
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between
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of
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coal all
most
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apply
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near each
others
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other
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which is higher
.
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while
while
other
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the other
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percentage of
energy
production was
lowest
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the lowest
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.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words energy, gas, petro, year with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.

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